 CommentsDevious Comments Thank you very much for this critique
you don't know how much I appreciate it. With all the mistakes in the anatomy and the coloring, I find it very kind of you to rate this with a 3/5. I would love to fix all the things you mentioned, but the paper's tooth is horribly ruined to the point where I can't even add any more pastel to it. It simply can't be done. I didn't think about the pink in the skin, and the highlights in the eyes totally slipped my mind. I normally always add highlights, thank you for pointing that out to me. Someone already told me the feet weren't proportional, and like I said, I would love to fix it, but I can't. I'm not sure I understand your comment about the heel and her butt. Are you saying I shouldn't have her rear end covering the ball of the heel? I do plan on remaking this piece, especially now that I know what I should improve next time. (however, I don't have the time) As far as the pale skin, because of the paper's quality, the light and dark browns I added into it refused to blend, I promise you. It sounds like I keep on making excuses for myself, and that's not my intention. But I believe the paper truly hindered the potential of this drawing. Even if the packaging claimed to be "pastel" paper. I will absolutely be using something different next time. I am by no means experienced when it comes to anatomy as you can plainly see. This only tells me I have a long way to go if I want to be successful. Thank you for your time. I find this critique to be the most helpful of all.   You are fully welcome, I’m glad my critique could be of so much help to you.
I understand how hard it can be to work with paper, you can only do so much to it before you have to stop, which is one of the many reasons why I like digital art as much as I do. I never have to start over on a new piece of paper.  But all joking aside, I understand where you are coming from. But try to keep in mind; critiques given on a finished piece of art are not meant to make the artist go back and fix every little thing, they are meant to help the artist on future works. The tips and suggestions are for long term use so that you can keep getting better with every piece of art you make. Don’t feel like you have to remake this if you don’t really want to. Just take the critiques with you to the next piece of art. And, yeah. Her rear end shouldn’t cover up the ball of her heel. I’m sorry I didn’t make that clear, I don’t know what I was thinking wording it that way… The ball of the heel is hard and pushes up on the fat of her bottom so you will always be able to see it when its in that pose. I would link you to some reference images to help explain how it works but the only good reference images I could find for that sort of thing are nude stock photos and I’m not sure if you will be able to view those, I can’t remember what age deviantart says you need to be before you can view mature content. -- I'm a lovely little cupcake, DON'T EAT ME! D= haha. Well, I would love to experiment with digital art, but I can't afford a tablet right now.
I'm not even 16, I can't legally get a job yet. So that's not my fault. But I agree, it seems that digital art would make the hassles of traditional media fade away. Well, to be honest, I want to remake this in a couple months, and look back to see how exactly I've improved. The same goes for my older works. I want to see my talents develop. I really do like this piece of mine and I want to make it better some day. I will absolutely use your advice in the future. It's a good thing you decided to mention the pinks in the skin color, because I haven't started the skin yet in this portrait I'm working on now. I'll be sure to experiment with it.  I also appreciate the proportion comparison you gave me with the feet and the size of the face. I think that's valuable advice. you're correct, I can't view mature content until my age says I'm 18, but thanks anyways. I'll see what I can find outside of DA. Again, I cannot thank you enough for taking the time out of your day to help me. <3 Well you're very welcome and best of luck on your next piece!
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The feet are undersized and the heel of the foot looks to be broken. They should be roughly as long as the face is from hairline to the bottom of the chin, even longer if the woman is taller then normal height or if it’s a man. The heel of the foot has bone in it and the woman’s butt is mostly fat, so the heel of the foot will always retain its shape and the fat will always “mold” around the foot. We should be able to see the ball of the heel clearly at all times.
There is no light reflecting in her eyes. There is lots of light on her body, the apple and her hair but none in her eyes and it makes the image look very flat. A little off-white placed just under the upper lid would fix this.
The skin is a little to on the pale side, even for someone with pale skin. There is no pink/light red in there that I can see. There should be some pink running across her cheeks and nose area, some in her fingers (Mostly the tips.) and in her toes, and then you should have a lighter pink (Lighter then what you would use for the face, fingers and toes.) running in-between the shadows and the light of the skin. A little pink in the right places brings the skin to life and makes the body look warm instead of dead cold.